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5 Hours-07/10/2011 (revised in 02/03/2012)

“5 Hours”
Written by Loi in July 10, 2011
And revised in February 3, 2012

I want to thank Colin for teaching me Standard English. Here what I wrote the original below:

-July 10, 2011-
There were so many clothes to do
5 hours to finish its!
Wash the clothes and dry its
For 5 hours
What make me feeling exhausted!


Here is my revision below:

-February 3, 2011
I washed so many clothes in the laundry
I dried so many clothes in the laundry
And I was waiting for 5 hours to finish the clothes
5 hours?
That makes me feel so exhausted!






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