I have been working on a new style, trying to get the feel for it... i was doing well but have been at a bit of a block lately.
I've decided to release what i have so far of the new style in hopes of getting feedback. I'm especially looking for input from people familiar with my past works.
Please remember:
THIS IS A WORK IN PROGRESS!
This is not a final version, this is only the first stanza I will include a vocaroo to help with tone.
A tangible darkness shrouds the looming creature
Hiding and denying the sight of its every intricate feature
Shown only the moonlit night, the eyes assumingly play deceiver
Though, unblinded, one would never be made a believer.
Surreptitious its intent, true malignance seemingly benign
Innocuous the sharpened malevolence, an exposed canine,
Stirring before me the creature of indistinguishable feature
Was conceivably now approached from behind.
Dauntingly the silhouette shifted, twisting, that I would find,
Slimy and shining was the skin of its horrific feature,
Seemingly riveted was the cerecloth spine.
Rising and falling its taut pale skin in an eerily perfect line
Donned upon the pasty flesh of the sinister bereaver
Was fraught a bloody and wickedly teasing streamer.
A trail of crimson bloodflow that seemingly began to twine,
Discorded a sight for one depicted as a screamer,
Emblazoning eternally an unfathomable horror-show within my mind,
So macabre was the scene now beginning to unwind.
Arcane the sentient being's conceivable demeanor,
The snarled beast augmentedly maligned,
Feverishly my precept of the beast was refined
When no longer curiosity was inclined,
Too late, as the beast was burnt into my mind.
You can listen to me reading this on Vocaroo here:
http://vocaroo.com/i/s05ELAXq751T
