Absent Minded
Writing class 101 (recent feedback)
here is my latest feedback for last week i hope this encourages people to see the advice others write and perhaps challenge others to crique openly and ohnestly, thank you for your feedback, i really appreciate it
hopefully those who stop by and read this will learn from eachother, feel free to give me som examples of writing tools etcetera in my feedback to post, I will give you credit for all comments you direct towards me that i publish,
lovers denials Feedback provided by: poetry2987
Oh, those sweet and lovely brides we marry! Where do they go? Nice work. 3rd stanza, 2nd line, "you're" for "your"; 7th line, I know you're using lowercase throughout, but "im" should really be "i'm." Good luck.
2007-09-18 15:06:23
My house (the house of God) Rating: Excellent
yep
2007-09-16 18:29:01
highstepnchix My challenge to the world Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
What are you so angry about? Life has dealt you a crummy and impossible hand,as it has. It never gets better,only worse as you travel life's highway trying to stay out of the ditches,and on the road there is not a straight and narrow.
2007-09-16 18:01:01
highstepnchix Hormonal Torture Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
profound wisdom offered here.excellent.
2007-09-16 17:52:23
highstepnchix Insufficient funds Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
Sounds like you have nothing but despair, hopelessness,no friends who can or will keep you from this pain. There are a lot of us in the same leaky boat,with holes and sinking fast.
2007-09-16 17:42:55
highstepnchix Recovering from me to you Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
Always sadden by events to which I have no control over.Often I wonder what would happen should I hsve some say.
hopefully those who stop by and read this will learn from eachother, feel free to give me som examples of writing tools etcetera in my feedback to post, I will give you credit for all comments you direct towards me that i publish,
lovers denials Feedback provided by: poetry2987
Oh, those sweet and lovely brides we marry! Where do they go? Nice work. 3rd stanza, 2nd line, "you're" for "your"; 7th line, I know you're using lowercase throughout, but "im" should really be "i'm." Good luck.
2007-09-18 15:06:23
My house (the house of God) Rating: Excellent
yep
2007-09-16 18:29:01
highstepnchix My challenge to the world Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
What are you so angry about? Life has dealt you a crummy and impossible hand,as it has. It never gets better,only worse as you travel life's highway trying to stay out of the ditches,and on the road there is not a straight and narrow.
2007-09-16 18:01:01
highstepnchix Hormonal Torture Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
profound wisdom offered here.excellent.
2007-09-16 17:52:23
highstepnchix Insufficient funds Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
Sounds like you have nothing but despair, hopelessness,no friends who can or will keep you from this pain. There are a lot of us in the same leaky boat,with holes and sinking fast.
2007-09-16 17:42:55
highstepnchix Recovering from me to you Feedback provided by: distinctfeelingspoetry3934
Always sadden by events to which I have no control over.Often I wonder what would happen should I hsve some say.
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Writing class 101 (recent feedback)
Writing class 101 (recent feedback)
