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Hello you, (yes, you)

I would truly appreciate your feedback on a poem I'm dabbling with.  (Saffron Songbird)  I've been playing with alliteration in this poem and need somebody's truest fresh eyes (and honest opionion) as I do not have a clear cut understanding on good technique.  Is this too much??  Pls leave a feedback if you have a moment to critique.  I will weigh all suggestions heavily. 

Greatest appreciation for your time,

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