unaffected

I love you Mate

It would be great if anyone could provide feedback, im not sure at all how this (or any of my others) sound. Greatly appreciated. [only been writing for a month or so]




I love you mate,
Don't be so rude...
There he walks,
my angel of heaven.
My gates to hell,
Do I pursue?
I know where that path leads to so,
I follow
Into the blackened abyss,
The swirling pit.
Fearful pain of my heart,
Ripping me apart.
Contort, convey,
Show me the way through this smoke
Which is Smothering me.
I feel funny,
And so glad,
That it is me and not you,
Yet I am sad,
little perspective of such a large hell.
I love you mate,
Don't be so rude...
Does my treacherous path not lead to your heart,
your desirable love?
This one single thought,
Hinged on your love,
This small bug I caught
Cannot tempt the fate,
Or promote my passion
For my wondrous mate.


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