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06/12/04
I Thought I Knew Hate Rating:
i love it. very truthful. seriously i really like. can you check out some of my poems. slfailc
No. No I can't.
22/11/04
2004-11-22 04:35:44
IP: 203.62.141.127
I Thought I Knew Hate Feedback provided by: poetry7904
I have felt these feelings at times. Your poetry has been a delight to read as I can feel your words are written from your heart. Well Done!! :-) signed poetry7904
2004-11-22 04:33:38
IP: 203.62.141.127
Wrap You Up Feedback provided by: poetry7904
A beautifully written poem, I loved reading this!! signed poetry7904
2004-11-22 04:32:15
IP: 203.62.141.127
My Broken World. Feedback provided by: poetry7904
This is an Amazing write, your words are very touching!! signed poetry7904
2004-11-22 04:30:11
IP: 203.62.141.127
''I Doubt You Really Know What Darkness Is.'' Feedback provided by: poetry7904
An EXCELLENT Write!! signed poetry7904
Thanks for wasting four or my five points you big idiot. *Blocks I.P*
21/11/04
Name PJ
Message Hi, my friend has started up his very own site
and i said that id help him get people to join.
I would really like it if you would.
http://groups.msn.com/VIEWSANDTHOUGHTS-
Yeah? Well I'd really like it if you'd choke on your own entrails and die rather than spamming my site, and probably a hundred others, with your stupid adverts and without reading any of the poetry. Begone, foul impish spawn!
15/11/04
Welcome To The Royal London Academy Of You Can All Kiss My A** Feedback provided by: pamoukaghlian
i think feedback should always be helpful
Not like this piece then?
09/11/04
2004-11-07 20:38:04
IP: 61.68.128.205
Settling Scars Feedback provided by: poet1210
I like this one my friend...It captured the imagination quickly....you write so well. poet1210
2004-11-07 20:36:34
IP: 61.68.128.205
Jason Feedback provided by: poet1210
Hello my friend...such a great tribute to a lovely writer. She will be proud of this and you should be proud of writing it...you have a good heart. poet1210
2004-11-07 20:34:59
IP: 61.68.128.205
Don't Care Feedback provided by: poet1210
Powerful to say the least my friend. poet1210
You are not my friend. *Blocks I.P*
05/11/04
Maybe You Can Sleep... Rating:
very touching write poetry i believe id written well if it makes you feel something real that u did
Need I comment?
04/11/04
2004-11-04 12:58:35
IP: 64.12.116.8
g2501770@cs.com I'm So Dumb Feedback provided by: guy
The repetitive nature of Humanity can seem like an oxymoron of intellegent thought, and yet the brightness sometimes shines through in the inventiveness of those same small fear bound creatures that hold onto the past. To learn is a route that is familar, to create is to walk a path full of danger, for here it is we encounter the opinions of those other than ourself. Self worth is sometimes the most important motivator in the life of an individual, and when we have the disdain from a stranger we can shrug our shoulders and say who cares, but when it is someone we love r respect our world seems to emplode upon us. Ignorance is a fact of life, for we are all ignorant in the being of something new, but stupidity is the ignoration of fact already recieve, and the blindness that marches to an already decerned conclusion. Unusual write, and will read you again. Guy Poetrypoem.com/guy
2004-11-04 12:46:37
IP: 64.12.116.8
g2501770@cs.com Shut Me Away Feedback provided by: guy
A world lost unto ourselves, where we are separated by thought if not body. We walk the land where shadows reign, and rule the light with the darkness of tomorrow that may come. Acceptance is not needed, for we will find our own way, and yet a weed filled path lies ahead, and to wonder what life should bring, if we would abandoned the meadow road we travel. New tomorrows may bring me pain, but the opinion of others are unwanted, because I am strong and can find destiny without you. I see independance and strngth within this piece, I also see a spirit which trust little unless it is earned, and then the trust is limited. I see intellegence and curiosity within a soul searching for prefection, but then seeing the garbage left behind by uncaring people who walked before them. Very thought provoking write, for it allows us to see and remember what life was or maybe still in a world that has nothing for those who don't capitulate. Very fine write, and will read you again. Guy Poetrypoem.com/guy
2004-11-04 12:36:57
IP: 64.12.116.8
g2501770@cs.com I Thought I Knew Hate Feedback provided by: guy
Hatred Blood stains from the fear of loss or understanding not The look of familarity not being what you soughtFootsteps in the meadow and nothing to be seen Light from over head without a visible means Words that make no sense in how they are said to be A view or and idea that skews the way we see All corners of life have mysteries we will find If the fear doesn't destroy it in the hatred we reprise. Come hold the hand of samness though the color not to true Listen to the songs of love in a language that is not you Sculpt the fate of Humanity in the dreams of yesterday To build upon a tolerance living life in the breezes sway. For we all view life different no matter who we are New thing step in front of us life the fatal speeding car Just watch and understand do not jump out from the curb For the road bump of tomorrow is when understanding goes unheard. W/By Guy Dan Schuyler ( Written for the author of this piece, I have kept no copy, for this is a gift.) Perspective is what we all have in common, for we all lok at things differently. Whne love turns to hate I agree that it is probably the most powerful hate there is, but hate itself comes from many places. Those places we usually keep hidden to continue the hatred we have found, so we may not find in ourselves the strength or beauty we see else where. I like this write of yours because you explore the world, and try to find answers. To question is to learn, to learn is to progress, and to progress is to become the poetry this world needs in becoming the beauty which God has hoped we will attain. Very powerful thoughts, and good write. Read you again. Guy Poetrypoem.com/guy
I hate you Guy.
(Does anybody have any f**k|ng idea what he's going on about? Does Guy have any idea what he's going on about? I vote not.)
My Site Of Rampant Sodomy Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
If only those who invent these words would be truthful about their own sexual practices.
2004-11-04 13:21:53
IP: 217.42.110.156
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
what is a 'nuse' ?
I hate you...whoever you are.
On another note, this is exactly what I was talking about in the poem 'My Site of Rampant Sodomy.' You just read the title and skipped to how evil I am. Well, for your information, yes, I do take it up the behind. From your Dad. Now go away and actually read the poem. Loser.
18/09/04
Welcome To The Royal London Academy Of You Can All Kiss My A** Rating:
Without conflict--even if it's thought useless at the time-- there can be no progress. "Some say existance is like a pirouot and pirouotte, forever in one place, stands still and dances, but it runs away, it seriously sadly runs away to fill the abyss' void with words with emptiness. It flows beside us in this water brook, but it flows over us. It flows between us to seperate us for a panic moment." -Robert Frost "West Running Brook" It's not even a full stanza, but someone's you get more in limitation then you do in infinite amounts. Travis AKA, www.poetrypoem.com/rohanman
*SNORE* Zzzz...Zzzz... *snort* huh? Oh, sorry, were you mindlessly spewing a load of completely pointless (rap in some sort of vain attempt at looking like you actually have any kind of slight grasp of any language? Because, my good sir, I can assure you that you don't have to try to so hard to look like you know what you're talking about. Everyone can plainly see that you do...not have any idea of the concepts of which you are spouting. You obviously have no clue what any of the stuff you just quoted means, and I'll be damned if the people who wrote it did either.
P.S: People who like Robert Frost have no grasp of reality. Or have at least never read anything else in their lives. Ever.
Void:
Was this actully feedback? I kinda slipped out of focus once you started quoting Frost.*Shudder.* What where you going on about? Did it have ANYTHING to do with kissing my brother's a*s? I think not. Maybe sucking it, but not kissing. In conclusion, shut up.
10/09/04
2004-09-10 23:06:55
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Night Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
Extremely good poem
2004-09-10 23:02:07
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Never Was, Never Will Be. Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
What happen here..very good poem, im interested in the rest of the story..what happened
2004-09-10 22:55:14
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
Wow..thats deep...strange poetic image, ilike ver
2004-09-10 22:48:10
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Bleeding the Stone Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
Excellent poem..im fine and how are you? Im new
Yeah, and it shows. Thanks for wasting all my points...
09/09/04
Scream Feedback provided by: poet1
songs like song lyrics. Good write. -Keye
Uh-oh, looks like your fingers are faster than your brain.
05/09/04
My Mistake Feedback provided by: lessonsinliving
I felt myself very much in this poem as if I had written it myself right now I can't believe in me so would you believe in me for awhile until I can believe in me again?thanks Lol :>)
What, why and huh?
Void:
You where touching yourself while reading this poem, eh?
...
...
... - ... No.
02/09/04
Settling Scars Feedback provided by: buch
I dig this poem!
You left me more or less the exact same feedback to another poem of mine... so if you're done digging my poems, could you leave some usefull comments, please?
28/08/04
Welcome To The Royal London Academy Of You Can All Kiss My A** Rating:
CRAP
That good, eh? I'm guessing your the same guy from before proving to me, once again, that you can't read. Not because the poem isn't "cr@p", oh no, my poetry sucks royal bollo(ks, that's for sure... but because it says right at the top and bottom of the poem that I don't care if someone gives me retarded negative feedback because it just shows that you know I'm better than you... you might as well give my details to your publisher now and fire yourself buddy, it's for the greater good, really.
27/08/04
Missing You Rating:
Ok, so after being SLAMMED by you and told I have no talent, and I ramble and I take too long to get to the point and my publishing is just a sham since I have no talent, I decided to visit your site and learn what it is I am suppose to be doing... hmm...
Um, no, that's not what I said. I said you have a good grasp of the language and you obviously have talent, you just write too much and it makes your poems dull and tedious. But since you haven't left any further comments on my poetry I can only assume that you read through them, saw that, yes, actually this kid does have some talent and does know what he's talking about and decided to shut your trap before you dug yourself into a nice little rutt.
Void:
I really can't think of anything to say... except that my brother quickly scrolled through your poem and I still couldn't be bothered to read it. Seriously, is it like, four pages long? Learn what's 'the end'. Like, for example:
THE. END.
12/07/04
Dedicated To Terrible Rhyme Schemes. Feedback provided by: poetry6020
i see no talent in this..
Funny, that's what I was about to sign your guestbook with...
OF COURSE there's no talent in it, you mindless, rampaging zombie! That's the WHOLE POINT of the poem! I am condeming the talentless with a talentless poem! Now that's talent. Come back when you're able to read into and analyse poetry at a higher level than my Goldfish.
Void:
He doesn't have any Goldfish...
09/07/04
I am suddenly reminded why I stopped using The Feedback Club...
2004-07-08 16:33:16
IP: 195.92.168.168
Ode to Brainless Feedback Feedback provided by: dreamofthescythe
definately ... different
Well done you lazy ass sheep person. You can see that the poem is "different". Well if all poems were the same, that would sort of defeat the point of writing a poem, wouldn't it? Your problem is your an avid conformist with no grasp of individual thought concepts and you will be forever restricted to poor quality poetry with no real meaning or passion behind the words because of it.
Void:
I can't really think of anything to say; he's summed you up in one big go there...
2004-07-08 15:44:16
IP: 195.92.168.167
Silent Demands Feedback provided by: theonespirit
Good for you.....:o)
Yes, indeed, "good for" me. But if I wanted that sort of comment I would've joined the "What's Good For Me Club" on some Green Peace site rather than the "Feedback Club" on a poetry site. Can your simple mind grasp the idea of reading of a poem? I'd say not, as you obviously haven't read mine. So thanks for wasting some of my points loser.
Void:
Shut...up.
2004-07-08 15:37:30
IP: 217.43.39.180
Scream Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
yeah ok
...
... ...
... ... ...
...You...
You're that s****y "Celtic Sonnets" guy...
Don't think I can't see through a new name. I have a special store in my mind for recording just how stupid different people are. You're easy to spot because you're at the bottom.
Leave me something that pointless again and I will go to the Admin. You just p**s me off that off.
Void:
Well that piece of feedback was..."interesting"!
...now shut up.
Ode to Brainless Feedback Feedback provided by: buch
I like this poem!
Good! Because that's a lot more than I can say for you.
Void:
I like you! ...I'm being sarcastic...as* hole.
05/07/04
poetrypoem.com/poetry8052 Back By Popular Demand: Happy Poetry! Rating:
I like that fact that you seem not to care what other poeple think. You write what you want and how you want and if people have a problem with it then they should go cry a river somewhere else. :)
You there, give feedback more often! Very well put! See that URL? Go to it. Give feedback.
Void:
Oh great! Waste someone else's points now, Sweetypea!
09/06/04
Meaningless Rating: Good
you like a song that says to "live for others and not yourself" ... not good www.poetrypoem.com/rohanman reef
And you're some stupid hick who's trying too hard to be "cool" and failing more miserably than the final Matrix film and coffee flavoured chocolates put together. Use your damned head you witless baboon; the poem doesn't literally mean: forget about yourself and do everything for other people. What it means put the needs of the people you love before your own desires.
But ooooooooh no. You had to be an idiot didn't you? So what kind of songs do you listen, Poindexter? Linkin Park? Blink182? Manson? Eminem? "Cool" bands like that, who go on forever about the unfairness of life and that sort of stuff? Well guess what dickweed, we're listening the same music and those messages are within a lot of their stuff.
So, Mr. "I think I'm so cool but in reality I'm just a loser with no friends", I suggest you go away and develop something called a personality. Oh, and stop trying to imitate your favourite computer game character, or whatever it is you're currently doing in a pathetic attempt to cover up your own meaningless existence and give your life some sort of void fulfilment. Because it just makes you an irritating non-person, doomed to be murdered by some axe-wielding madman… most probably myself.
"Meaningless rating" is right...
Void:
It's my axe! Clean it when you're done... and he's not gonna furfil me...go away.
20/05/04
2004-05-20 10:39:54
princesscharming@swbell.net Never Was, Never Will Be. Feedback provided by: princesscharming
Your poetry makes me think... which isn't a good thing this early in the morning!
Feedback on poetry only, please.
2004-05-20 10:38:20
princesscharming@swbell.net Meaningless Feedback provided by: princesscharming
True... definitely not meaningless.
2004-05-20 10:36:50
princesscharming@swbell.net Sing Feedback provided by: princesscharming
Hearts lie too.
HAVE YOU EVER HEARD YOUR HEART LIE??? If so, I take anything mean I've said to you back and want to be your friend, 'cos it won't be long before you're rich. Wow, a talking heart...
Void:
Gneh, gneh..."heart". Hearts are delicious! And a talking one? I'm willing to bet it's even better!
2004-05-20 10:31:47
princesscharming@swbell.net Back By Popular Demand: Happy Poetry! Feedback provided by: princesscharming
Aww, man, that one made me laugh really hard... great poem. Love the sarcasm dripping from your words!
If I've said it once, I've said it a million times... LOOK AT HOW MANY POINTS I HAVE!! I HAD FOUR POINTS WHEN YOU SENT ME THIS FEEDBACK!! So what do you do? WASTE THEM ALL. Just think. I wish that everybody would just take a second and just bloody think... the world would be such a better place if people would just stop and think about what they're doing and what it'll mean to other people! Did you really think I only want feedback from you? THINK.
2004-05-20 10:28:38
Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: author1988
Nice peice . !!!
"Nice-space-peice-space-fullstop-space-exclaimation mark-exclaimation mark-exclaimation mark"
I rest my case.
Void:
I don't think the case is quite over yet. Notice, they spelt piece incorrectly. NOW the case is closed!
05/05/04
Just when I thought I was going to be able to get by with a simple "Pop-Up Blocker" some brick from the world up stairs had to come up with another bright idea, didn't they?
Now I have to put up with this advertising b/s chucking itself all over the site! Everywhere I look there are "Wonderful Poems For Wonderful People".
OH MY GOD. Do you actively practise being boring or does the ability to be as embarassingly unarticulate as possible come as a natural talent to some of you people? Call me a pessimist, but I wouldn't get very far if I described everything as "nice" now would I?
Quite frankly, I'm never going to click on one of these things where everybody claims to be the best poet on the site in a feeble attempt to drag attention to thier pathetic poems because they'd rather waste thier money than give feedback to someone else's poetry.
And what is it with people putting in these adverts that they're the author of some poem or other? WHO CARES? If you have to resort to paying for people for read your poems then you're obviously not worth reading! You're a nobody and your poems are nothing!
If I suddenly decide to abolish my workrate and make one of these things, I'm not going to say something like "A site of the most amazing poems for people to relate to!" Because, even though that is correct, for all my loving readers know, I might be lying.
No,no,no... My advert would say something like "All my poety sucks, but get and read it anyway or I'm gonna come and kill you!"
Which advert would you be more likely to click on?
30/04/04
Love and Skin Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
interesting
NOOOO!!! WHY?? WHY FOUL WORD, WHY?? WHY DO YOU TORMENT ME SO?? WHY?? WHY? WHY? WHY?
21/04/04
2004-04-20 09:55:56
Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: sweetcuppincakes
Aren't we all demons in our dreams or something crazy like that?
...No.
Void: That sounds like hippy talk to me...
2004-04-20 09:55:26
Meaningless Feedback provided by: sweetcuppincakes
I hate music that describes perfectly how I feel because then the terrorists are winning. Probably.
...No.
Void: Meaningless feedback ay?
2004-04-20 09:54:45
I Never Liked Maybe. Feedback provided by: sweetcuppincakes
No one ever likes maybe...
I think that's a rather harsh judgement to make. Maybe is always better than ...No.
Void: I like maybe. It gets peoples hopes up before I say ...No.
2004-04-19 16:05:03
buch22@hotmail.com My Mistake Feedback provided by: buch
I dig it!
You have no idea of:
a)How little those three words mean to me.
b)How amazingly stupid you are.
c) ...No.
Void: I realy can't think of anything to say here...Oh, wait I know.
...No.
2004-04-19 09:47:40
The Boy In The Picture Feedback provided by: moorethoughts
interesting...but that's the way some people are today.
...What?
...No.
Void:
Wha? Ya...No.
18/04/04
The Pain of Life Feedback provided by:
really like it. good rhyming and it really sticks with you. well it sticks with me.
What the hell? Feedback provided by nobody? That's just creepy...
2004-04-18 07:11:52
Night Feedback provided by: bunion
its not the night nor the darkness that hurts its the souls within it and demons of the mind good piece
2004-04-18 07:10:21
The Dealer Feedback provided by: bunion
does anyone selling a product these days care about its cost to you
2004-04-18 07:08:13
Losers Feedback provided by: bunion
good
2004-04-18 07:06:55
Don't Care Feedback provided by: bunion
worth the read
2004-04-18 07:05:46
One Heart Feedback provided by: bunion
great piece thanks for sharing
Thanks for wasting all of my f*****g points you f*****g @sshole. Stay the f**k away from my site. It's losers like you who send me cr@p that has nothing to do with the f*****g poems they read and drain all my points with stupid one sentence/word replies that really p**s me off. I've always been determined never to sink to that level, but if I ever and I mean EVER come across your s****y poetry site full of your s****y poems while I'm using Feedback Club, then I will drain all of your points with senseless bulls**t and I don't care how many you have! I'll sit there all f*****g day if I have to and if I'm lucky maybe you'll hang yourself or something. Good day.
Void:
Points aren't that important... get over it.
16/04/04
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: kittypixie
This is rele good!! *smiles!*
Rele? fanx! *grins!*
My brother says he doesn't want to dignify this by mocking you. :-)
09/04/04
Never Liked Maybe. Rating: Excellent
this is a Excellent poem keep up the good work and thanx for the best feedback on my poetry page I am 24 and all my boyfriends is 2 years younger than me they are stupid because they none understand my poetry
If you done write all y'all poems like yous did done write me that there feedback then it don't none surprise me none that them there boyfriends don't didn't none understand y'all poems little miss!
Void:
What the hell? I know Chipmonks who can type better... in fact, I know Chimps AND monks that can type better than you. Please remove all chances of you having children, because I don't want more people like you.
07/04/04
Who Am I? Feedback provided by: poet5224
OH DEAR< YOUR TRUELY REAL, I feel as though you arent able to speak, like your hushed before your heard. Listen to your love within you. YOUR TRUELY REAL! GREAT WRTITING. I CAN RELATE TO THIS! :)
"Oh dear lesser than the truly real you own, I feel as though you are unable to speak, like the hushed before heard you own." That, my simple minded friend, is what your first sentence says when translated into unabbreviated English.
Your second sentence isn't much better, but I think people get where I'm going with that, so I shall move on...
Yes people, it is true, I am afraid to admit that I AM actually real, as disappointing as that may be to all of you. Although, from a philosophical point of view I could also argue that nothing is "real"... if we go by the good ol' trusty "I think, therefore, I am" example, then we can safely conclude that you don't exist, at any rate.
Never, and I do mean never - y'know, never, like when something won't happen under any circumstance - try to give me advice, especially if it's philosophical and DEFINITELY if it's religious. I know perfectly well who I am. My poetry is more for other people to relate to, so that they don't feel so lonely or lost or stupid or down trodden. You said yourself that you can relate to it...
So, next time, just you remember that you could relate to it and that if I actually wrote the damned poem then I've probably already spent some time pondering the concepts within it and don't need your worthless advice.
Void:
Sadly, he is real. I wish he wasn't... but not so much that I wish that you would DIE HORRIBLY AND LEAVE YOUR ENTRIALS ON SOMEBODY YOU DON'T KNOW'S DOORSTEP! Moron...
05/04/04
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: kertmoorspoetry
Your brother needs help! the cyber universe is too much in his brain, sounds like a good kid, he is a kid, right???
You oviously haven't seen this page. My brother is a bad, bad, woman beating, lazy, demon possesing, whingey, agressive, crazy, Hitler-esqe, insect torturing little boy... who doesn't wash properly.
Oh, and he's 41 years old - birthday in December.
Ooops, I mean, 14 years old. Had you scared there, didn't I? ;-)
Void:
It's more like I'm too much for cyberspace. You rarely find someone as psychopathic and insane as I am. Void, 14, coming up 63! The only person to be born a bitter old man!
30/03/04
2004-03-29 18:01:10
Voice In The Dark Feedback provided by: heartworks
Another great poem,like it alot Gene
2004-03-29 18:00:30
Meaningless Feedback provided by: heartworks
Well whatever the catalyst, It is very well written and has great flow Gene
2004-03-29 17:59:28
Maybe You Can Sleep... Feedback provided by: heartworks
Awesome write Gene
Damnit it, my name isn't Gene!!!
26/03/04
Will Somebody Please Think of the Children! Rating: Excellent
Interesting , but i liked it. keep up the good work.
My brother is currently spasing out on my bed because of this comment. Basically, what you're saying is, you don't like interesting things? I think I'll leave it there.
22/03/04
2004-03-18 09:22:03
Eyes of the Damned Feedback provided by: krazeekid920
great title!
Yes, thank you. But I'm curious, do you only come onto this site to read the titles of poems? That seems a little pointless. Do you routinely scan this site looking for cool titles to read? Because you can tell SO much about a poem from it's title can't you? Geeze, get a work rate...
Void:
stupid moron!
Try sending some FEEDBACK next time! Or better yet, don't try again! Or even better... dunk your head in a boiling frying pan.
2004-03-18 09:21:46
Look Out! He's Got An Opinion! (Again.) Feedback provided by: krazeekid920
i cant really imagine that as a rap...maybe becuase i dont rap...hmm...oh well it was good. i used to support bush...but he let things go just a little to far
2004-03-18 09:20:36
YA! You hear that Bush? I have more supporters than you do! You had better be as glad as I am that I'm not some hillbilly red neck, 'cos you can gaurentee I'd be running for President!
Void:
That's right Sweetypea. You have ONE follower, which is by far, several million more than Bush. Including his owin familiy... and anti-people.
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: krazeekid920
i think i would enjoy reading the story..you should send me a copy when your brother finishes! :0)
Yeah, or you could go out and buy it, you lazy bum...
Void:
Aw, you like my story! I have to compliment you on your good taste! But because of the smilie, you only get half out of a million... (Me hatesie da smilie!)
14/03/04
2004-03-13 21:58:26
Dedicated To Terrible Rhyme Schemes. Feedback provided by: exrea
Good one!
2004-03-13 21:56:28
Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: exrea
Good one!
SQUAWK! Polly wanna cracker!
SQUAWK! Polly wanna cracker!
Void:
SQUAWK! Polly is an a*s hole!
SQUAWK! Polly i- *collapses in puddle of own vomit.*
13/03/04
2004-03-11 22:26:09
Settling Scars Feedback provided by: heartworks
great write Gene
2004-03-11 22:25:36
Until Dawn Feedback provided by: heartworks
Another beautiful poem Gene...{katsman}
2004-03-11 22:24:46
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: heartworks
A beautiful write Gene
Hi Gene! (problem.) Thanks for wasting my points. You might be interested to know that my name isn't Gene. I guess you're just another silly American, shortening words with more than five letters because you're sloth and stupid. In fact it would seem that you're so lazy, that rather than writing "Sweetypea" you actually made up a name for me... well thanks a lot, I really appreciate it.
Note to certain idiots(you know who you are!): If you're signing off with your name you must have something creating a break between your name and the rest of the comment. If it's a commar creating the break, then your name should be on the line below.
ex:
I'm a big fat moron,
Gene.
Otherwise, a hythen/dash/hash(Not many people call it that, and those who have obviously haven't smoked the stuff) (-) or one of those cool squiggily lines (~) works quite well.
See how easy it is to prevent confusion if you don't swap your brain for toilet paper?
Void:
Hee-hee. He's name is really Gene, he's just playing around! ...FOOLED YA! You probably fell for it with your one digit I.Q there...a*s hole.
12/03/04
Silent Demands Feedback provided by: shennibubbsworldofpoetry
very articulate! well done.. hey we have a forum on main forum you would be most welcome! "Shennis place" we are fun loving and your poetry would be read that little bit more also. Hope to see you there btw you can also have your own section inside the forum so come visit! Take care Shenni
For starters, you are either very stupid or simply the most untalented and unarticulate poet ever.
Oh. Sorry, I didn't realise I'd been graced by the talentless Shenni Bubb.
The most uncommon word in that poem is "forgoer" and it's hardly a complicated word. The rest of the words in that poem come up in every day conversation.
Well, maybe not your everyday conversation, but everyday conversation none the less.
Now, I have to ask, why in the world would I want to go on the fourms and flaunt myself like some big headed loser? Why the hell should I get my own section on the fourms? Just because I have some talent doesn't mean I have to stamp it all over everyone else.
My poems aren't about showing off and being better, they're for people to relate to and help them feel good about themselves. I can't do that if I have my own section to show off everything I do on, I won't be on the same level as the people I'm trying to communicate to...
Bottom line; I'll turn into another talentless, washed-up poet like everyone else who has their own part on the fourms.
So, no, Shenni, I will not be gracing the fourms and I will not become another brown nosing loser and I will certainly not put myself in position to be brown-nosed upon.
Go away and try to remember why you started writing poems. Real poems. Not those cr@ppy little things with no meaning that you write nowdays.
Void:
Yeah? You know what? No. Just...No. In a bag. On a Stick. In a jar. DOUBLE TIME! Doo-bada-doo-bada-doo-didi-doo. Man...I'm so high right now... Man, I'm so high I think your poety's good! Cr@p...
11/03/04
Will Somebody Please Think of the Children! Feedback provided by: moringlory
Killer Poem!
Stupid feedback!
Void:
Killer Me!
Gonna Killer you!
01/03/04
Come And Get Me. Feedback provided by: youniverse
"be all that you can be . . ."?
Um... "okay . . ."?
Well done! You've successfully quoted a line that wasn't even in the poem. I am truely disgusted at your immense inability to comprehend the most mundane of tasks... such as giving feedback about a poem.
I'll see you in special needs next time I volenteer to help the "special" children. (Which is never.)
Seriously, could you have done anything more brainless? What does that even mean? ""be all that you can be . . ."?" notice the quotation marks indicating that this is a quote. Since it is in reference to my poem, I can only assume that that is a line in the poem. (Which it isn't...)
Then, the question mark afterwards implies that you are confused about something. What? Are you confused because a certain line that doesn't have anything to do with anything isn't in poem that's about facing fears? What kind of idiot are you? You're the kind of person they write those "Dummies" books for, you know that?
Now children, this is the letter "B"...
Void:
"Either you can read lines that aren't there, or you're crazy mister" Gneh, gneh... I love that line.
Alleycat_Poetry@webtv.net No Escape Feedback provided by: thealleycat
Interesting.
Is not!
Void:
Is too! DOUBLE TAIME!
25/02/04
No Escape Feedback provided by: faitheverlastin
such a poem of hopelessness... <3 F.E.
Um, yeah, I could've told you that. The idea of giving feedback is that you tell people what you think and hopefully give them insight into something they didn't know.
I also notice you're religious. That more or less explains it.
Void:
Well D'UH! that's kinda the whole point... as a note, faith another way to say "I have nothing to live for."
17/02/04
Eyes of the Damned Feedback provided by: author851
You don't have to live like everyone else, and you obviously aren't self absorbed like some. Mabey you will be the leader teaching others through your poetry and actions how to live a life that nourishes their souls.
Yay, I'm Jesus!
Void:
Lets get this straight. We both hate people more than you can think. ALL of this poetry is about people's stupidity. We BOTH are amazingly self-centered if you define it by "Cares only for self" as we have worked out that basicly everyone isn't worth thinking about.
Well, speak for yourself...
16/02/04
2004-02-16 03:20:21
Don't Care Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
just be yourself
....Oooooookay.... So now that I'm being myself, would you like to give me some feedback? I don't care what pointless "advice" you have to give me - I want feedback on my poem. I don't want or need your opinions of me and quite frankly I'd only be too happy if you never have anything to do with my life... FEEDBACK.
Void:
Here's some advice for you! Just don't be a moron! Oh, I'm afraid you can't... now if you excuse I've got to murder your parents.
2004-02-16 03:19:00
Wandering Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
interesting
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Starts melting into a pool of gloop*
Void:
Do you know how many mops I've wasted on him already?
2004-02-16 00:36:04
Losers Feedback provided by: sisterren
May Jesus bless and keep you
No, he may not! The last thing I need is religious spam clogging up my site! Get the hel-uh-"heck" away from me!
Void:
Religion burns me... so I burn it back! Remember kids... I crucified Jesus! With a fork. The Bible is the PG version!
15/02/04
Misunderstood Ravings of a Misunderstood Mind Feedback provided by: jolush
I hate "know-it-alls".
Yeah... so, that's all you managed to pick out of this poem? That it reminded you that you hate "know-it-alls". Well thank you ever so much, if I ever have amnesia I'll know to read this poem. Unfortunately, I DON'T have amnesia and as such, I couldn't care less who you hate - that was not feedback you sent me.
Void:
I hate "you". And Sweetypea: If you had amneisa, you wouldn't remember to read this poem! Silly goose...
No Escape Feedback provided by: anchra10444
The poor bastard.
So... did you like/read the poem? Yes, the character in the poem is pretty buggered, but I don't think you know him well enough to make such a comment! Please stick to giving feedback, rather than meaningless comments on a certain aspect of the poem.
Void:
You shouldn't talk about your father in that way.
13/02/04
Misunderstood Ravings of a Misunderstood Mind Feedback provided by: hotrodruss
only you can make your own decisions. nice rite
Ah, my favourite pet hate: people who give me feedback that has nothing to do with the poem. Please read the poem before you give feedback on it and in future remember to stay the hell away from my site. Thank you.
Void:
I have made the decision to nail you to your own floor. With the bones of your puppy... If you have no puppy, your parents with do just fine.
09/02/04
Look Out! He's Got An Opinion! (Again.) Feedback provided by: poetry1864
So misinformed. If you only knew what Willy Clinton did to this country. He sjowed that there is nothing sacred to men like him. He had the power and oppotunity to eliminate Osama, and many to rid the world of Saddam. I am glad our CIF has the balls to make a stand that Bill lacked and still lacks! Don't take offense that is just my honest opinion. Thanks
Uh-huh. The only misinformed person here is you, my friend. "Willy Clinton", as you so appropriately named him, has nothing to do with America and the state it's in anymore, but you still seem to think he's the President and Geroge Bush is just a temporary problem untill Clinton returns... Clinton had nothing to do with that poem, so why you even bought him up is beyond the reasoning of normal people. I am well aware of what Mr.Clinton did for America; far more than what Bush has. Bill Clinton opened eyes and stopped America before it got in over it's head and the whole country spiraled into debt, thus ruining it's large, yet fragile, economy. Something that Bush doesn't care about. All Bush ever does is screw America up more and more. He know's it's all coming to a head and that's why he's making the bucks for his family now! I'll have you know that oil IS the ONLY reason Bush went to war. Just because you're stupid enough to sign your possessions away to the Bush administration, doesn't mean the rest of us are too far brainwashed to beleive that the proverbial wool he's pulled over our eyes is really to stop the sun burning away our retnas. Some of us don't live in a little fantasy world were politicans all tell the truth and everybody leads real nice lives. It doesn't matter what Bill lacked or still lacks because he has nothing to do with America anymore! Try reading a newspaper and actually finding out what's really happening in the world! It's not my fualt you voted in a leader who gets three when he adds one and two halfs together, so don't you dare tell me that I'M wrong when you, your moron President and other people like you are running around starting wars and single handedly destryoing one of the most powerful nations in the world to divert attention from what's really going on.
Well, I'm done.
Void:
Shut up.
01/02/04
Pinch and a punch, first idiots of the month!
Bleeding the Stone Feedback provided by: deadkiss
hmm. has alot to say.
Hmmm... You have no grasp of grammar. You obviously didn't read the poem either. I'm guessing you're probably lying about having an acoustic CD coming out as well, considering none of your poetry has much to say either and they're all the same anyway. Almost nobody buys those kinds of CDs anymore and a company wouldn't waste their money like that. I probably sound jealous, but I don't get jealous, I just get annoyed with people who exaggerate and maraud themselves.
Void:
Peanuts. That is what your brain shares an I.Q with.
californiabari54@netscape.net Indeed, Where IS The Love? Feedback provided by: californiabari772
sounds like this could be either an essay or a dialogue from a play!
Um, yeah, but it's neither. For 17 years old you really have no conenction with the outside world... if you'd like to read it, you'll notice it actually follows the rythem of "Where Is The Love?"... y'know... ironey...
Void: *Beats you to death*
31/01/04
This feedback posted for being good...
2004-01-31 11:39:41
The Hood Feedback provided by: lynettemariemckinney
enjoyed this one as well nice write. lynettemariemckinney
2004-01-31 11:38:18
Go Away Feedback provided by: lynettemariemckinney
I have felt this way before I enjoyed being in your mind for a moment nice poem. lynettemariemckinney
Lynette Marie McKinney everyone! Not only is she an amazing poet, but she also knows how to give good feedback! And she isn't bad looking either. (But married... >_<) Well, may that be a lesson to the rest of you... WE LOVE YOU LYNNE! (And now I have her e-mail address... mwaha,mwahaaa,mwahahahaaaa, MWHAAAHAAHAHAHAAAA!)
This bit, however, is up for being dumb.
Back By Popular Demand: Happy Poetry! Feedback provided by: ghettoluv
thats good could you check mi site out and give me feedback.
Yeah, sure I'd love to, except...how-about-NO! You obviously haven't even read "mi" damned poem, so you're lucky I even bothered to read your advert-uh-feedback. I use Feedback Club and if your sh!te, uh, site, happens to pop up, then I'll give you feedback, if it doesn't, then I won't. GOD DAMN IT - you didn't even put any punctuation in your advert...feedback, whatever. If you're too dumb to put in one lousy commar, why should I even assume you're smart enough for me to waste valuable hours attempting to deciphier any of your punctuationless poetry?
*Random murmings and various threats.*
Void:
That's my trademark! Steal it, I'll sue ya!
28/01/04
Dedicated To Terrible Rhyme Schemes. Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Its so great to see that you're not afraid to show your personality
2004-01-27 17:39:30
Sing Feedback provided by: lgwc02
You are a really talented poet.
2004-01-27 17:38:15
Sanity's Requiem Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Great. The pace seemed to really pick up.
2004-01-27 17:37:26
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: lgwc02
LoL. Your right, I won't try to understand it.
2004-01-27 17:36:00
Losers Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Great poem.
2004-01-27 17:14:45
Liar In My Heart Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Great Poem
2004-01-27 16:43:44
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: lgwc02
That was good
2004-01-27 16:41:17
lgwc02@hotmail.com Not Going To Let You Give Up Now. Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Your poem was beautiful. It really touched me inside...and your rantings made me laugh! :)
2004-01-27 16:38:30
Misunderstood Ravings of a Misunderstood Mind Feedback provided by: lgwc02
HaHaHa, aptly titled.
2004-01-27 16:37:38
Take Me, Take Her. Feedback provided by: lgwc02
That was beautiful!
As nice as your words are, I would technically class this as spam. You've wasted ALL my points for feedback with the combined amount of words coming to less than 70. So let's see how funny you think my rantings are now! I'm big enough not to go to your site and waste all of your points and whatever, however, seeing as you couldn't be bothered to click on the next poet's site, I couldnt be bothered not to delete your e-mail adress, so anybody who feels like spamming the hell out of your account can freely do so. If you really like my poems, go to my site and read them. Don't waste my points and time in one big go like that, because no matter how good the feedback is, it won't make me like you.
27/01/04
Gift Feedback provided by: nat33
have u a physic ability? Is that what the poem is about? well written!
No, I was never any good at physics. However, my Idiot Senses detect that you meant psychic. In which case, yes... I can read yor mind and... I see... I see... a donkey with a fly buzzing around it's head, sitting by a tree and playing a banjo...yes...yes...
Void:
Now Sweetypea, that's unfair. It's more like dancing turtles with little guitars. Do-do-deleie-doo!
26/01/04
Liar In My Heart Feedback provided by: hotrodruss
YOU CAN'T HIDE NICE WRITE
What?
Void:
Are you threatening me? Or are you implying I suck at hide and seek? Either way, I'll kill you. With a brick.
24/01/04
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: poetryofkenyalamar
lol...I can see this world...that's probably not a good thing..lol
You seem nice enough, so I'll keep this short: I-WANT-WHAT-YOU'RE-SMOKING. (lol)
Void:
Welcome to my world. I suggest taking dried frog pills.
If you don't get it, you don't deserve to live.
Eyes of the Damned Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
interesting a bit bleak the idea that life is merely a passage to another state of being.
Hey...you're right, that IS interesting! Now how about you stop making moron assumptions about the meanings of my poetry and actually read the damn thing then actually give me some feedback worth my while. This poem actually has very little to do with death and the afterlife and all that kind of cr@p. It's more about oppression and stuff. You can tell me what your interpretation of a poem is... but never tell me what they mean so directly.
Void:
Let's test your theory of life being pointless... You get the spoon, I'll get the scissors!
22/01/04
Sing Feedback provided by: hotrodruss
yeah that's one good thing about writing, all the stress is given to the pap er or the computer. nice write
"Pap er" and computers don't feel stress... they are inanimate objects and as such have no feelings what so ever. I assume you get guilty if you rip a piece of "pap er" or smack a computer? In fact, I'm willing to bet you tuck your computer in at night in a nice cosy bed and bring it bacon and eggs in the morning. I also take it you don't use toilet "pap er", but rather wipe out the...uh...'residue' and send it to people as feedback.
Void:
That's surprisingly witty, Sweetypea...since we've run out of wit, I'm gonna have to be violent! You get the spoon, I'll get the scissors
20/01/04
Wandering Feedback provided by: demonicbunny
sunscreen. dont forget the sunscreen
Brains. Don't forget your brains. Oh, sorry, you can't forget things that you never had.
Void:
What? What? WHAT? I KEEEEEL YOOO!
10/01/04
The Hood F
It annoys the hell out of me when people complain about hardships and such because of their own actions. Like when criminals complain that their sentence is too long or that prison is too harsh. Quite simply, they shouldn't have broken the law. And so, if you appear on this page and are offended, don't come crying to me or run off and tell the owner or something... because quite simply you shouldn't have left me some senseless/stupid/brainless/time wasting/abusive/incorrect feedback.
You have been told.
As a note, my brother will also be posting on here now, so if Void disses any of you, you know it was my brother.
06/12/04
I Thought I Knew Hate Rating:
i love it. very truthful. seriously i really like. can you check out some of my poems. slfailc
No. No I can't.
22/11/04
2004-11-22 04:35:44
IP: 203.62.141.127
I Thought I Knew Hate Feedback provided by: poetry7904
I have felt these feelings at times. Your poetry has been a delight to read as I can feel your words are written from your heart. Well Done!! :-) signed poetry7904
2004-11-22 04:33:38
IP: 203.62.141.127
Wrap You Up Feedback provided by: poetry7904
A beautifully written poem, I loved reading this!! signed poetry7904
2004-11-22 04:32:15
IP: 203.62.141.127
My Broken World. Feedback provided by: poetry7904
This is an Amazing write, your words are very touching!! signed poetry7904
2004-11-22 04:30:11
IP: 203.62.141.127
''I Doubt You Really Know What Darkness Is.'' Feedback provided by: poetry7904
An EXCELLENT Write!! signed poetry7904
Thanks for wasting four or my five points you big idiot. *Blocks I.P*
21/11/04
Name PJ
Message Hi, my friend has started up his very own site
and i said that id help him get people to join.
I would really like it if you would.
http://groups.msn.com/VIEWSANDTHOUGHTS-
Yeah? Well I'd really like it if you'd choke on your own entrails and die rather than spamming my site, and probably a hundred others, with your stupid adverts and without reading any of the poetry. Begone, foul impish spawn!
15/11/04
Welcome To The Royal London Academy Of You Can All Kiss My A** Feedback provided by: pamoukaghlian
i think feedback should always be helpful
Not like this piece then?
09/11/04
2004-11-07 20:38:04
IP: 61.68.128.205
Settling Scars Feedback provided by: poet1210
I like this one my friend...It captured the imagination quickly....you write so well. poet1210
2004-11-07 20:36:34
IP: 61.68.128.205
Jason Feedback provided by: poet1210
Hello my friend...such a great tribute to a lovely writer. She will be proud of this and you should be proud of writing it...you have a good heart. poet1210
2004-11-07 20:34:59
IP: 61.68.128.205
Don't Care Feedback provided by: poet1210
Powerful to say the least my friend. poet1210
You are not my friend. *Blocks I.P*
05/11/04
Maybe You Can Sleep... Rating:
very touching write poetry i believe id written well if it makes you feel something real that u did
Need I comment?
04/11/04
2004-11-04 12:58:35
IP: 64.12.116.8
g2501770@cs.com I'm So Dumb Feedback provided by: guy
The repetitive nature of Humanity can seem like an oxymoron of intellegent thought, and yet the brightness sometimes shines through in the inventiveness of those same small fear bound creatures that hold onto the past. To learn is a route that is familar, to create is to walk a path full of danger, for here it is we encounter the opinions of those other than ourself. Self worth is sometimes the most important motivator in the life of an individual, and when we have the disdain from a stranger we can shrug our shoulders and say who cares, but when it is someone we love r respect our world seems to emplode upon us. Ignorance is a fact of life, for we are all ignorant in the being of something new, but stupidity is the ignoration of fact already recieve, and the blindness that marches to an already decerned conclusion. Unusual write, and will read you again. Guy Poetrypoem.com/guy
2004-11-04 12:46:37
IP: 64.12.116.8
g2501770@cs.com Shut Me Away Feedback provided by: guy
A world lost unto ourselves, where we are separated by thought if not body. We walk the land where shadows reign, and rule the light with the darkness of tomorrow that may come. Acceptance is not needed, for we will find our own way, and yet a weed filled path lies ahead, and to wonder what life should bring, if we would abandoned the meadow road we travel. New tomorrows may bring me pain, but the opinion of others are unwanted, because I am strong and can find destiny without you. I see independance and strngth within this piece, I also see a spirit which trust little unless it is earned, and then the trust is limited. I see intellegence and curiosity within a soul searching for prefection, but then seeing the garbage left behind by uncaring people who walked before them. Very thought provoking write, for it allows us to see and remember what life was or maybe still in a world that has nothing for those who don't capitulate. Very fine write, and will read you again. Guy Poetrypoem.com/guy
2004-11-04 12:36:57
IP: 64.12.116.8
g2501770@cs.com I Thought I Knew Hate Feedback provided by: guy
Hatred Blood stains from the fear of loss or understanding not The look of familarity not being what you soughtFootsteps in the meadow and nothing to be seen Light from over head without a visible means Words that make no sense in how they are said to be A view or and idea that skews the way we see All corners of life have mysteries we will find If the fear doesn't destroy it in the hatred we reprise. Come hold the hand of samness though the color not to true Listen to the songs of love in a language that is not you Sculpt the fate of Humanity in the dreams of yesterday To build upon a tolerance living life in the breezes sway. For we all view life different no matter who we are New thing step in front of us life the fatal speeding car Just watch and understand do not jump out from the curb For the road bump of tomorrow is when understanding goes unheard. W/By Guy Dan Schuyler ( Written for the author of this piece, I have kept no copy, for this is a gift.) Perspective is what we all have in common, for we all lok at things differently. Whne love turns to hate I agree that it is probably the most powerful hate there is, but hate itself comes from many places. Those places we usually keep hidden to continue the hatred we have found, so we may not find in ourselves the strength or beauty we see else where. I like this write of yours because you explore the world, and try to find answers. To question is to learn, to learn is to progress, and to progress is to become the poetry this world needs in becoming the beauty which God has hoped we will attain. Very powerful thoughts, and good write. Read you again. Guy Poetrypoem.com/guy
I hate you Guy.
(Does anybody have any f**k|ng idea what he's going on about? Does Guy have any idea what he's going on about? I vote not.)
My Site Of Rampant Sodomy Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
If only those who invent these words would be truthful about their own sexual practices.
2004-11-04 13:21:53
IP: 217.42.110.156
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
what is a 'nuse' ?
I hate you...whoever you are.
On another note, this is exactly what I was talking about in the poem 'My Site of Rampant Sodomy.' You just read the title and skipped to how evil I am. Well, for your information, yes, I do take it up the behind. From your Dad. Now go away and actually read the poem. Loser.
18/09/04
Welcome To The Royal London Academy Of You Can All Kiss My A** Rating:
Without conflict--even if it's thought useless at the time-- there can be no progress. "Some say existance is like a pirouot and pirouotte, forever in one place, stands still and dances, but it runs away, it seriously sadly runs away to fill the abyss' void with words with emptiness. It flows beside us in this water brook, but it flows over us. It flows between us to seperate us for a panic moment." -Robert Frost "West Running Brook" It's not even a full stanza, but someone's you get more in limitation then you do in infinite amounts. Travis AKA, www.poetrypoem.com/rohanman
*SNORE* Zzzz...Zzzz... *snort* huh? Oh, sorry, were you mindlessly spewing a load of completely pointless (rap in some sort of vain attempt at looking like you actually have any kind of slight grasp of any language? Because, my good sir, I can assure you that you don't have to try to so hard to look like you know what you're talking about. Everyone can plainly see that you do...not have any idea of the concepts of which you are spouting. You obviously have no clue what any of the stuff you just quoted means, and I'll be damned if the people who wrote it did either.
P.S: People who like Robert Frost have no grasp of reality. Or have at least never read anything else in their lives. Ever.
Void:
Was this actully feedback? I kinda slipped out of focus once you started quoting Frost.*Shudder.* What where you going on about? Did it have ANYTHING to do with kissing my brother's a*s? I think not. Maybe sucking it, but not kissing. In conclusion, shut up.
10/09/04
2004-09-10 23:06:55
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Night Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
Extremely good poem
2004-09-10 23:02:07
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Never Was, Never Will Be. Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
What happen here..very good poem, im interested in the rest of the story..what happened
2004-09-10 22:55:14
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
Wow..thats deep...strange poetic image, ilike ver
2004-09-10 22:48:10
IP: 192.76.237.154
shadowpoet696 Bleeding the Stone Feedback provided by: shadowpoet696
Excellent poem..im fine and how are you? Im new
Yeah, and it shows. Thanks for wasting all my points...
09/09/04
Scream Feedback provided by: poet1
songs like song lyrics. Good write. -Keye
Uh-oh, looks like your fingers are faster than your brain.
05/09/04
My Mistake Feedback provided by: lessonsinliving
I felt myself very much in this poem as if I had written it myself right now I can't believe in me so would you believe in me for awhile until I can believe in me again?thanks Lol :>)
What, why and huh?
Void:
You where touching yourself while reading this poem, eh?
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... - ... No.
02/09/04
Settling Scars Feedback provided by: buch
I dig this poem!
You left me more or less the exact same feedback to another poem of mine... so if you're done digging my poems, could you leave some usefull comments, please?
28/08/04
Welcome To The Royal London Academy Of You Can All Kiss My A** Rating:
CRAP
That good, eh? I'm guessing your the same guy from before proving to me, once again, that you can't read. Not because the poem isn't "cr@p", oh no, my poetry sucks royal bollo(ks, that's for sure... but because it says right at the top and bottom of the poem that I don't care if someone gives me retarded negative feedback because it just shows that you know I'm better than you... you might as well give my details to your publisher now and fire yourself buddy, it's for the greater good, really.
27/08/04
Missing You Rating:
Ok, so after being SLAMMED by you and told I have no talent, and I ramble and I take too long to get to the point and my publishing is just a sham since I have no talent, I decided to visit your site and learn what it is I am suppose to be doing... hmm...
Um, no, that's not what I said. I said you have a good grasp of the language and you obviously have talent, you just write too much and it makes your poems dull and tedious. But since you haven't left any further comments on my poetry I can only assume that you read through them, saw that, yes, actually this kid does have some talent and does know what he's talking about and decided to shut your trap before you dug yourself into a nice little rutt.
Void:
I really can't think of anything to say... except that my brother quickly scrolled through your poem and I still couldn't be bothered to read it. Seriously, is it like, four pages long? Learn what's 'the end'. Like, for example:
THE. END.
12/07/04
Dedicated To Terrible Rhyme Schemes. Feedback provided by: poetry6020
i see no talent in this..
Funny, that's what I was about to sign your guestbook with...
OF COURSE there's no talent in it, you mindless, rampaging zombie! That's the WHOLE POINT of the poem! I am condeming the talentless with a talentless poem! Now that's talent. Come back when you're able to read into and analyse poetry at a higher level than my Goldfish.
Void:
He doesn't have any Goldfish...
09/07/04
I am suddenly reminded why I stopped using The Feedback Club...
2004-07-08 16:33:16
IP: 195.92.168.168
Ode to Brainless Feedback Feedback provided by: dreamofthescythe
definately ... different
Well done you lazy ass sheep person. You can see that the poem is "different". Well if all poems were the same, that would sort of defeat the point of writing a poem, wouldn't it? Your problem is your an avid conformist with no grasp of individual thought concepts and you will be forever restricted to poor quality poetry with no real meaning or passion behind the words because of it.
Void:
I can't really think of anything to say; he's summed you up in one big go there...
2004-07-08 15:44:16
IP: 195.92.168.167
Silent Demands Feedback provided by: theonespirit
Good for you.....:o)
Yes, indeed, "good for" me. But if I wanted that sort of comment I would've joined the "What's Good For Me Club" on some Green Peace site rather than the "Feedback Club" on a poetry site. Can your simple mind grasp the idea of reading of a poem? I'd say not, as you obviously haven't read mine. So thanks for wasting some of my points loser.
Void:
Shut...up.
2004-07-08 15:37:30
IP: 217.43.39.180
Scream Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
yeah ok
...
... ...
... ... ...
...You...
You're that s****y "Celtic Sonnets" guy...
Don't think I can't see through a new name. I have a special store in my mind for recording just how stupid different people are. You're easy to spot because you're at the bottom.
Leave me something that pointless again and I will go to the Admin. You just p**s me off that off.
Void:
Well that piece of feedback was..."interesting"!
...now shut up.
Ode to Brainless Feedback Feedback provided by: buch
I like this poem!
Good! Because that's a lot more than I can say for you.
Void:
I like you! ...I'm being sarcastic...as* hole.
05/07/04
poetrypoem.com/poetry8052 Back By Popular Demand: Happy Poetry! Rating:
I like that fact that you seem not to care what other poeple think. You write what you want and how you want and if people have a problem with it then they should go cry a river somewhere else. :)
You there, give feedback more often! Very well put! See that URL? Go to it. Give feedback.
Void:
Oh great! Waste someone else's points now, Sweetypea!
09/06/04
Meaningless Rating: Good
you like a song that says to "live for others and not yourself" ... not good www.poetrypoem.com/rohanman reef
And you're some stupid hick who's trying too hard to be "cool" and failing more miserably than the final Matrix film and coffee flavoured chocolates put together. Use your damned head you witless baboon; the poem doesn't literally mean: forget about yourself and do everything for other people. What it means put the needs of the people you love before your own desires.
But ooooooooh no. You had to be an idiot didn't you? So what kind of songs do you listen, Poindexter? Linkin Park? Blink182? Manson? Eminem? "Cool" bands like that, who go on forever about the unfairness of life and that sort of stuff? Well guess what dickweed, we're listening the same music and those messages are within a lot of their stuff.
So, Mr. "I think I'm so cool but in reality I'm just a loser with no friends", I suggest you go away and develop something called a personality. Oh, and stop trying to imitate your favourite computer game character, or whatever it is you're currently doing in a pathetic attempt to cover up your own meaningless existence and give your life some sort of void fulfilment. Because it just makes you an irritating non-person, doomed to be murdered by some axe-wielding madman… most probably myself.
"Meaningless rating" is right...
Void:
It's my axe! Clean it when you're done... and he's not gonna furfil me...go away.
20/05/04
2004-05-20 10:39:54
princesscharming@swbell.net Never Was, Never Will Be. Feedback provided by: princesscharming
Your poetry makes me think... which isn't a good thing this early in the morning!
Feedback on poetry only, please.
2004-05-20 10:38:20
princesscharming@swbell.net Meaningless Feedback provided by: princesscharming
True... definitely not meaningless.
2004-05-20 10:36:50
princesscharming@swbell.net Sing Feedback provided by: princesscharming
Hearts lie too.
HAVE YOU EVER HEARD YOUR HEART LIE??? If so, I take anything mean I've said to you back and want to be your friend, 'cos it won't be long before you're rich. Wow, a talking heart...
Void:
Gneh, gneh..."heart". Hearts are delicious! And a talking one? I'm willing to bet it's even better!
2004-05-20 10:31:47
princesscharming@swbell.net Back By Popular Demand: Happy Poetry! Feedback provided by: princesscharming
Aww, man, that one made me laugh really hard... great poem. Love the sarcasm dripping from your words!
If I've said it once, I've said it a million times... LOOK AT HOW MANY POINTS I HAVE!! I HAD FOUR POINTS WHEN YOU SENT ME THIS FEEDBACK!! So what do you do? WASTE THEM ALL. Just think. I wish that everybody would just take a second and just bloody think... the world would be such a better place if people would just stop and think about what they're doing and what it'll mean to other people! Did you really think I only want feedback from you? THINK.
2004-05-20 10:28:38
Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: author1988
Nice peice . !!!
"Nice-space-peice-space-fullstop-space-exclaimation mark-exclaimation mark-exclaimation mark"
I rest my case.
Void:
I don't think the case is quite over yet. Notice, they spelt piece incorrectly. NOW the case is closed!
05/05/04
Just when I thought I was going to be able to get by with a simple "Pop-Up Blocker" some brick from the world up stairs had to come up with another bright idea, didn't they?
Now I have to put up with this advertising b/s chucking itself all over the site! Everywhere I look there are "Wonderful Poems For Wonderful People".
OH MY GOD. Do you actively practise being boring or does the ability to be as embarassingly unarticulate as possible come as a natural talent to some of you people? Call me a pessimist, but I wouldn't get very far if I described everything as "nice" now would I?
Quite frankly, I'm never going to click on one of these things where everybody claims to be the best poet on the site in a feeble attempt to drag attention to thier pathetic poems because they'd rather waste thier money than give feedback to someone else's poetry.
And what is it with people putting in these adverts that they're the author of some poem or other? WHO CARES? If you have to resort to paying for people for read your poems then you're obviously not worth reading! You're a nobody and your poems are nothing!
If I suddenly decide to abolish my workrate and make one of these things, I'm not going to say something like "A site of the most amazing poems for people to relate to!" Because, even though that is correct, for all my loving readers know, I might be lying.
No,no,no... My advert would say something like "All my poety sucks, but get and read it anyway or I'm gonna come and kill you!"
Which advert would you be more likely to click on?
30/04/04
Love and Skin Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
interesting
NOOOO!!! WHY?? WHY FOUL WORD, WHY?? WHY DO YOU TORMENT ME SO?? WHY?? WHY? WHY? WHY?
21/04/04
2004-04-20 09:55:56
Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: sweetcuppincakes
Aren't we all demons in our dreams or something crazy like that?
...No.
Void: That sounds like hippy talk to me...
2004-04-20 09:55:26
Meaningless Feedback provided by: sweetcuppincakes
I hate music that describes perfectly how I feel because then the terrorists are winning. Probably.
...No.
Void: Meaningless feedback ay?
2004-04-20 09:54:45
I Never Liked Maybe. Feedback provided by: sweetcuppincakes
No one ever likes maybe...
I think that's a rather harsh judgement to make. Maybe is always better than ...No.
Void: I like maybe. It gets peoples hopes up before I say ...No.
2004-04-19 16:05:03
buch22@hotmail.com My Mistake Feedback provided by: buch
I dig it!
You have no idea of:
a)How little those three words mean to me.
b)How amazingly stupid you are.
c) ...No.
Void: I realy can't think of anything to say here...Oh, wait I know.
...No.
2004-04-19 09:47:40
The Boy In The Picture Feedback provided by: moorethoughts
interesting...but that's the way some people are today.
...What?
...No.
Void:
Wha? Ya...No.
18/04/04
The Pain of Life Feedback provided by:
really like it. good rhyming and it really sticks with you. well it sticks with me.
What the hell? Feedback provided by nobody? That's just creepy...
2004-04-18 07:11:52
Night Feedback provided by: bunion
its not the night nor the darkness that hurts its the souls within it and demons of the mind good piece
2004-04-18 07:10:21
The Dealer Feedback provided by: bunion
does anyone selling a product these days care about its cost to you
2004-04-18 07:08:13
Losers Feedback provided by: bunion
good
2004-04-18 07:06:55
Don't Care Feedback provided by: bunion
worth the read
2004-04-18 07:05:46
One Heart Feedback provided by: bunion
great piece thanks for sharing
Thanks for wasting all of my f*****g points you f*****g @sshole. Stay the f**k away from my site. It's losers like you who send me cr@p that has nothing to do with the f*****g poems they read and drain all my points with stupid one sentence/word replies that really p**s me off. I've always been determined never to sink to that level, but if I ever and I mean EVER come across your s****y poetry site full of your s****y poems while I'm using Feedback Club, then I will drain all of your points with senseless bulls**t and I don't care how many you have! I'll sit there all f*****g day if I have to and if I'm lucky maybe you'll hang yourself or something. Good day.
Void:
Points aren't that important... get over it.
16/04/04
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: kittypixie
This is rele good!! *smiles!*
Rele? fanx! *grins!*
My brother says he doesn't want to dignify this by mocking you. :-)
09/04/04
Never Liked Maybe. Rating: Excellent
this is a Excellent poem keep up the good work and thanx for the best feedback on my poetry page I am 24 and all my boyfriends is 2 years younger than me they are stupid because they none understand my poetry
If you done write all y'all poems like yous did done write me that there feedback then it don't none surprise me none that them there boyfriends don't didn't none understand y'all poems little miss!
Void:
What the hell? I know Chipmonks who can type better... in fact, I know Chimps AND monks that can type better than you. Please remove all chances of you having children, because I don't want more people like you.
07/04/04
Who Am I? Feedback provided by: poet5224
OH DEAR< YOUR TRUELY REAL, I feel as though you arent able to speak, like your hushed before your heard. Listen to your love within you. YOUR TRUELY REAL! GREAT WRTITING. I CAN RELATE TO THIS! :)
"Oh dear lesser than the truly real you own, I feel as though you are unable to speak, like the hushed before heard you own." That, my simple minded friend, is what your first sentence says when translated into unabbreviated English.
Your second sentence isn't much better, but I think people get where I'm going with that, so I shall move on...
Yes people, it is true, I am afraid to admit that I AM actually real, as disappointing as that may be to all of you. Although, from a philosophical point of view I could also argue that nothing is "real"... if we go by the good ol' trusty "I think, therefore, I am" example, then we can safely conclude that you don't exist, at any rate.
Never, and I do mean never - y'know, never, like when something won't happen under any circumstance - try to give me advice, especially if it's philosophical and DEFINITELY if it's religious. I know perfectly well who I am. My poetry is more for other people to relate to, so that they don't feel so lonely or lost or stupid or down trodden. You said yourself that you can relate to it...
So, next time, just you remember that you could relate to it and that if I actually wrote the damned poem then I've probably already spent some time pondering the concepts within it and don't need your worthless advice.
Void:
Sadly, he is real. I wish he wasn't... but not so much that I wish that you would DIE HORRIBLY AND LEAVE YOUR ENTRIALS ON SOMEBODY YOU DON'T KNOW'S DOORSTEP! Moron...
05/04/04
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: kertmoorspoetry
Your brother needs help! the cyber universe is too much in his brain, sounds like a good kid, he is a kid, right???
You oviously haven't seen this page. My brother is a bad, bad, woman beating, lazy, demon possesing, whingey, agressive, crazy, Hitler-esqe, insect torturing little boy... who doesn't wash properly.
Oh, and he's 41 years old - birthday in December.
Ooops, I mean, 14 years old. Had you scared there, didn't I? ;-)
Void:
It's more like I'm too much for cyberspace. You rarely find someone as psychopathic and insane as I am. Void, 14, coming up 63! The only person to be born a bitter old man!
30/03/04
2004-03-29 18:01:10
Voice In The Dark Feedback provided by: heartworks
Another great poem,like it alot Gene
2004-03-29 18:00:30
Meaningless Feedback provided by: heartworks
Well whatever the catalyst, It is very well written and has great flow Gene
2004-03-29 17:59:28
Maybe You Can Sleep... Feedback provided by: heartworks
Awesome write Gene
Damnit it, my name isn't Gene!!!
26/03/04
Will Somebody Please Think of the Children! Rating: Excellent
Interesting , but i liked it. keep up the good work.
My brother is currently spasing out on my bed because of this comment. Basically, what you're saying is, you don't like interesting things? I think I'll leave it there.
22/03/04
2004-03-18 09:22:03
Eyes of the Damned Feedback provided by: krazeekid920
great title!
Yes, thank you. But I'm curious, do you only come onto this site to read the titles of poems? That seems a little pointless. Do you routinely scan this site looking for cool titles to read? Because you can tell SO much about a poem from it's title can't you? Geeze, get a work rate...
Void:
stupid moron!
Try sending some FEEDBACK next time! Or better yet, don't try again! Or even better... dunk your head in a boiling frying pan.
2004-03-18 09:21:46
Look Out! He's Got An Opinion! (Again.) Feedback provided by: krazeekid920
i cant really imagine that as a rap...maybe becuase i dont rap...hmm...oh well it was good. i used to support bush...but he let things go just a little to far
2004-03-18 09:20:36
YA! You hear that Bush? I have more supporters than you do! You had better be as glad as I am that I'm not some hillbilly red neck, 'cos you can gaurentee I'd be running for President!
Void:
That's right Sweetypea. You have ONE follower, which is by far, several million more than Bush. Including his owin familiy... and anti-people.
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: krazeekid920
i think i would enjoy reading the story..you should send me a copy when your brother finishes! :0)
Yeah, or you could go out and buy it, you lazy bum...
Void:
Aw, you like my story! I have to compliment you on your good taste! But because of the smilie, you only get half out of a million... (Me hatesie da smilie!)
14/03/04
2004-03-13 21:58:26
Dedicated To Terrible Rhyme Schemes. Feedback provided by: exrea
Good one!
2004-03-13 21:56:28
Demon Of My Dreams Feedback provided by: exrea
Good one!
SQUAWK! Polly wanna cracker!
SQUAWK! Polly wanna cracker!
Void:
SQUAWK! Polly is an a*s hole!
SQUAWK! Polly i- *collapses in puddle of own vomit.*
13/03/04
2004-03-11 22:26:09
Settling Scars Feedback provided by: heartworks
great write Gene
2004-03-11 22:25:36
Until Dawn Feedback provided by: heartworks
Another beautiful poem Gene...{katsman}
2004-03-11 22:24:46
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: heartworks
A beautiful write Gene
Hi Gene! (problem.) Thanks for wasting my points. You might be interested to know that my name isn't Gene. I guess you're just another silly American, shortening words with more than five letters because you're sloth and stupid. In fact it would seem that you're so lazy, that rather than writing "Sweetypea" you actually made up a name for me... well thanks a lot, I really appreciate it.
Note to certain idiots(you know who you are!): If you're signing off with your name you must have something creating a break between your name and the rest of the comment. If it's a commar creating the break, then your name should be on the line below.
ex:
I'm a big fat moron,
Gene.
Otherwise, a hythen/dash/hash(Not many people call it that, and those who have obviously haven't smoked the stuff) (-) or one of those cool squiggily lines (~) works quite well.
See how easy it is to prevent confusion if you don't swap your brain for toilet paper?
Void:
Hee-hee. He's name is really Gene, he's just playing around! ...FOOLED YA! You probably fell for it with your one digit I.Q there...a*s hole.
12/03/04
Silent Demands Feedback provided by: shennibubbsworldofpoetry
very articulate! well done.. hey we have a forum on main forum you would be most welcome! "Shennis place" we are fun loving and your poetry would be read that little bit more also. Hope to see you there btw you can also have your own section inside the forum so come visit! Take care Shenni
For starters, you are either very stupid or simply the most untalented and unarticulate poet ever.
Oh. Sorry, I didn't realise I'd been graced by the talentless Shenni Bubb.
The most uncommon word in that poem is "forgoer" and it's hardly a complicated word. The rest of the words in that poem come up in every day conversation.
Well, maybe not your everyday conversation, but everyday conversation none the less.
Now, I have to ask, why in the world would I want to go on the fourms and flaunt myself like some big headed loser? Why the hell should I get my own section on the fourms? Just because I have some talent doesn't mean I have to stamp it all over everyone else.
My poems aren't about showing off and being better, they're for people to relate to and help them feel good about themselves. I can't do that if I have my own section to show off everything I do on, I won't be on the same level as the people I'm trying to communicate to...
Bottom line; I'll turn into another talentless, washed-up poet like everyone else who has their own part on the fourms.
So, no, Shenni, I will not be gracing the fourms and I will not become another brown nosing loser and I will certainly not put myself in position to be brown-nosed upon.
Go away and try to remember why you started writing poems. Real poems. Not those cr@ppy little things with no meaning that you write nowdays.
Void:
Yeah? You know what? No. Just...No. In a bag. On a Stick. In a jar. DOUBLE TIME! Doo-bada-doo-bada-doo-didi-doo. Man...I'm so high right now... Man, I'm so high I think your poety's good! Cr@p...
11/03/04
Will Somebody Please Think of the Children! Feedback provided by: moringlory
Killer Poem!
Stupid feedback!
Void:
Killer Me!
Gonna Killer you!
01/03/04
Come And Get Me. Feedback provided by: youniverse
"be all that you can be . . ."?
Um... "okay . . ."?
Well done! You've successfully quoted a line that wasn't even in the poem. I am truely disgusted at your immense inability to comprehend the most mundane of tasks... such as giving feedback about a poem.
I'll see you in special needs next time I volenteer to help the "special" children. (Which is never.)
Seriously, could you have done anything more brainless? What does that even mean? ""be all that you can be . . ."?" notice the quotation marks indicating that this is a quote. Since it is in reference to my poem, I can only assume that that is a line in the poem. (Which it isn't...)
Then, the question mark afterwards implies that you are confused about something. What? Are you confused because a certain line that doesn't have anything to do with anything isn't in poem that's about facing fears? What kind of idiot are you? You're the kind of person they write those "Dummies" books for, you know that?
Now children, this is the letter "B"...
Void:
"Either you can read lines that aren't there, or you're crazy mister" Gneh, gneh... I love that line.
Alleycat_Poetry@webtv.net No Escape Feedback provided by: thealleycat
Interesting.
Is not!
Void:
Is too! DOUBLE TAIME!
25/02/04
No Escape Feedback provided by: faitheverlastin
such a poem of hopelessness... <3 F.E.
Um, yeah, I could've told you that. The idea of giving feedback is that you tell people what you think and hopefully give them insight into something they didn't know.
I also notice you're religious. That more or less explains it.
Void:
Well D'UH! that's kinda the whole point... as a note, faith another way to say "I have nothing to live for."
17/02/04
Eyes of the Damned Feedback provided by: author851
You don't have to live like everyone else, and you obviously aren't self absorbed like some. Mabey you will be the leader teaching others through your poetry and actions how to live a life that nourishes their souls.
Yay, I'm Jesus!
Void:
Lets get this straight. We both hate people more than you can think. ALL of this poetry is about people's stupidity. We BOTH are amazingly self-centered if you define it by "Cares only for self" as we have worked out that basicly everyone isn't worth thinking about.
Well, speak for yourself...
16/02/04
2004-02-16 03:20:21
Don't Care Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
just be yourself
....Oooooookay.... So now that I'm being myself, would you like to give me some feedback? I don't care what pointless "advice" you have to give me - I want feedback on my poem. I don't want or need your opinions of me and quite frankly I'd only be too happy if you never have anything to do with my life... FEEDBACK.
Void:
Here's some advice for you! Just don't be a moron! Oh, I'm afraid you can't... now if you excuse I've got to murder your parents.
2004-02-16 03:19:00
Wandering Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
interesting
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *Starts melting into a pool of gloop*
Void:
Do you know how many mops I've wasted on him already?
2004-02-16 00:36:04
Losers Feedback provided by: sisterren
May Jesus bless and keep you
No, he may not! The last thing I need is religious spam clogging up my site! Get the hel-uh-"heck" away from me!
Void:
Religion burns me... so I burn it back! Remember kids... I crucified Jesus! With a fork. The Bible is the PG version!
15/02/04
Misunderstood Ravings of a Misunderstood Mind Feedback provided by: jolush
I hate "know-it-alls".
Yeah... so, that's all you managed to pick out of this poem? That it reminded you that you hate "know-it-alls". Well thank you ever so much, if I ever have amnesia I'll know to read this poem. Unfortunately, I DON'T have amnesia and as such, I couldn't care less who you hate - that was not feedback you sent me.
Void:
I hate "you". And Sweetypea: If you had amneisa, you wouldn't remember to read this poem! Silly goose...
No Escape Feedback provided by: anchra10444
The poor bastard.
So... did you like/read the poem? Yes, the character in the poem is pretty buggered, but I don't think you know him well enough to make such a comment! Please stick to giving feedback, rather than meaningless comments on a certain aspect of the poem.
Void:
You shouldn't talk about your father in that way.
13/02/04
Misunderstood Ravings of a Misunderstood Mind Feedback provided by: hotrodruss
only you can make your own decisions. nice rite
Ah, my favourite pet hate: people who give me feedback that has nothing to do with the poem. Please read the poem before you give feedback on it and in future remember to stay the hell away from my site. Thank you.
Void:
I have made the decision to nail you to your own floor. With the bones of your puppy... If you have no puppy, your parents with do just fine.
09/02/04
Look Out! He's Got An Opinion! (Again.) Feedback provided by: poetry1864
So misinformed. If you only knew what Willy Clinton did to this country. He sjowed that there is nothing sacred to men like him. He had the power and oppotunity to eliminate Osama, and many to rid the world of Saddam. I am glad our CIF has the balls to make a stand that Bill lacked and still lacks! Don't take offense that is just my honest opinion. Thanks
Uh-huh. The only misinformed person here is you, my friend. "Willy Clinton", as you so appropriately named him, has nothing to do with America and the state it's in anymore, but you still seem to think he's the President and Geroge Bush is just a temporary problem untill Clinton returns... Clinton had nothing to do with that poem, so why you even bought him up is beyond the reasoning of normal people. I am well aware of what Mr.Clinton did for America; far more than what Bush has. Bill Clinton opened eyes and stopped America before it got in over it's head and the whole country spiraled into debt, thus ruining it's large, yet fragile, economy. Something that Bush doesn't care about. All Bush ever does is screw America up more and more. He know's it's all coming to a head and that's why he's making the bucks for his family now! I'll have you know that oil IS the ONLY reason Bush went to war. Just because you're stupid enough to sign your possessions away to the Bush administration, doesn't mean the rest of us are too far brainwashed to beleive that the proverbial wool he's pulled over our eyes is really to stop the sun burning away our retnas. Some of us don't live in a little fantasy world were politicans all tell the truth and everybody leads real nice lives. It doesn't matter what Bill lacked or still lacks because he has nothing to do with America anymore! Try reading a newspaper and actually finding out what's really happening in the world! It's not my fualt you voted in a leader who gets three when he adds one and two halfs together, so don't you dare tell me that I'M wrong when you, your moron President and other people like you are running around starting wars and single handedly destryoing one of the most powerful nations in the world to divert attention from what's really going on.
Well, I'm done.
Void:
Shut up.
01/02/04
Pinch and a punch, first idiots of the month!
Bleeding the Stone Feedback provided by: deadkiss
hmm. has alot to say.
Hmmm... You have no grasp of grammar. You obviously didn't read the poem either. I'm guessing you're probably lying about having an acoustic CD coming out as well, considering none of your poetry has much to say either and they're all the same anyway. Almost nobody buys those kinds of CDs anymore and a company wouldn't waste their money like that. I probably sound jealous, but I don't get jealous, I just get annoyed with people who exaggerate and maraud themselves.
Void:
Peanuts. That is what your brain shares an I.Q with.
californiabari54@netscape.net Indeed, Where IS The Love? Feedback provided by: californiabari772
sounds like this could be either an essay or a dialogue from a play!
Um, yeah, but it's neither. For 17 years old you really have no conenction with the outside world... if you'd like to read it, you'll notice it actually follows the rythem of "Where Is The Love?"... y'know... ironey...
Void: *Beats you to death*
31/01/04
This feedback posted for being good...
2004-01-31 11:39:41
The Hood Feedback provided by: lynettemariemckinney
enjoyed this one as well nice write. lynettemariemckinney
2004-01-31 11:38:18
Go Away Feedback provided by: lynettemariemckinney
I have felt this way before I enjoyed being in your mind for a moment nice poem. lynettemariemckinney
Lynette Marie McKinney everyone! Not only is she an amazing poet, but she also knows how to give good feedback! And she isn't bad looking either. (But married... >_<) Well, may that be a lesson to the rest of you... WE LOVE YOU LYNNE! (And now I have her e-mail address... mwaha,mwahaaa,mwahahahaaaa, MWHAAAHAAHAHAHAAAA!)
This bit, however, is up for being dumb.
Back By Popular Demand: Happy Poetry! Feedback provided by: ghettoluv
thats good could you check mi site out and give me feedback.
Yeah, sure I'd love to, except...how-about-NO! You obviously haven't even read "mi" damned poem, so you're lucky I even bothered to read your advert-uh-feedback. I use Feedback Club and if your sh!te, uh, site, happens to pop up, then I'll give you feedback, if it doesn't, then I won't. GOD DAMN IT - you didn't even put any punctuation in your advert...feedback, whatever. If you're too dumb to put in one lousy commar, why should I even assume you're smart enough for me to waste valuable hours attempting to deciphier any of your punctuationless poetry?
*Random murmings and various threats.*
Void:
That's my trademark! Steal it, I'll sue ya!
28/01/04
Dedicated To Terrible Rhyme Schemes. Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Its so great to see that you're not afraid to show your personality
2004-01-27 17:39:30
Sing Feedback provided by: lgwc02
You are a really talented poet.
2004-01-27 17:38:15
Sanity's Requiem Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Great. The pace seemed to really pick up.
2004-01-27 17:37:26
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: lgwc02
LoL. Your right, I won't try to understand it.
2004-01-27 17:36:00
Losers Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Great poem.
2004-01-27 17:14:45
Liar In My Heart Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Great Poem
2004-01-27 16:43:44
Drifting Feeling Feedback provided by: lgwc02
That was good
2004-01-27 16:41:17
lgwc02@hotmail.com Not Going To Let You Give Up Now. Feedback provided by: lgwc02
Your poem was beautiful. It really touched me inside...and your rantings made me laugh! :)
2004-01-27 16:38:30
Misunderstood Ravings of a Misunderstood Mind Feedback provided by: lgwc02
HaHaHa, aptly titled.
2004-01-27 16:37:38
Take Me, Take Her. Feedback provided by: lgwc02
That was beautiful!
As nice as your words are, I would technically class this as spam. You've wasted ALL my points for feedback with the combined amount of words coming to less than 70. So let's see how funny you think my rantings are now! I'm big enough not to go to your site and waste all of your points and whatever, however, seeing as you couldn't be bothered to click on the next poet's site, I couldnt be bothered not to delete your e-mail adress, so anybody who feels like spamming the hell out of your account can freely do so. If you really like my poems, go to my site and read them. Don't waste my points and time in one big go like that, because no matter how good the feedback is, it won't make me like you.
27/01/04
Gift Feedback provided by: nat33
have u a physic ability? Is that what the poem is about? well written!
No, I was never any good at physics. However, my Idiot Senses detect that you meant psychic. In which case, yes... I can read yor mind and... I see... I see... a donkey with a fly buzzing around it's head, sitting by a tree and playing a banjo...yes...yes...
Void:
Now Sweetypea, that's unfair. It's more like dancing turtles with little guitars. Do-do-deleie-doo!
26/01/04
Liar In My Heart Feedback provided by: hotrodruss
YOU CAN'T HIDE NICE WRITE
What?
Void:
Are you threatening me? Or are you implying I suck at hide and seek? Either way, I'll kill you. With a brick.
24/01/04
Void Incorporated Feedback provided by: poetryofkenyalamar
lol...I can see this world...that's probably not a good thing..lol
You seem nice enough, so I'll keep this short: I-WANT-WHAT-YOU'RE-SMOKING. (lol)
Void:
Welcome to my world. I suggest taking dried frog pills.
If you don't get it, you don't deserve to live.
Eyes of the Damned Feedback provided by: poetslwriterslcoluk
interesting a bit bleak the idea that life is merely a passage to another state of being.
Hey...you're right, that IS interesting! Now how about you stop making moron assumptions about the meanings of my poetry and actually read the damn thing then actually give me some feedback worth my while. This poem actually has very little to do with death and the afterlife and all that kind of cr@p. It's more about oppression and stuff. You can tell me what your interpretation of a poem is... but never tell me what they mean so directly.
Void:
Let's test your theory of life being pointless... You get the spoon, I'll get the scissors!
22/01/04
Sing Feedback provided by: hotrodruss
yeah that's one good thing about writing, all the stress is given to the pap er or the computer. nice write
"Pap er" and computers don't feel stress... they are inanimate objects and as such have no feelings what so ever. I assume you get guilty if you rip a piece of "pap er" or smack a computer? In fact, I'm willing to bet you tuck your computer in at night in a nice cosy bed and bring it bacon and eggs in the morning. I also take it you don't use toilet "pap er", but rather wipe out the...uh...'residue' and send it to people as feedback.
Void:
That's surprisingly witty, Sweetypea...since we've run out of wit, I'm gonna have to be violent! You get the spoon, I'll get the scissors
20/01/04
Wandering Feedback provided by: demonicbunny
sunscreen. dont forget the sunscreen
Brains. Don't forget your brains. Oh, sorry, you can't forget things that you never had.
Void:
What? What? WHAT? I KEEEEEL YOOO!
10/01/04
The Hood F
