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Name: Elanor
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Message: Hello, Thanks for the feedback. I hope this answers your questions. A BELIEF IN LOVE, NOW ALL THAT'S LEFT IS A GAP THAT CONSUMES...By this I was referring to what's left after love is gone and there seems to be no hope of ever feeling that way. You walk around with what seems like a void inside you. That void is the gap I was referring to. It "consumes all" because its an emptiness that has to be filled. If not by love then the opposite which is hate . I didn't describe death but her eyes being "crimson as death in the eye". I chose crimson to show just how quick something pure can be tainted to become sinister. Crimson is not just red but dark red. Crimson as death in the eye meaning all good is lost. It implies that evil now reigns in her and as sure as death delivers death so will she. You were right about it being a homonym😊. The tenses are correct. When I wrote this poem I was in a dark place....a little broken. The words just flowed and I wrote them as they editing no re-write so yes it might not be so perfect. "A succubus is a demon in female form, or supernatural entity in folklore (traced back to medieval legend), that appears in dreams and takes the form of a woman in order to seduce men, usually through sexual activity. ........Religious traditions hold that repeated sexual activity with a succubus may result in the deterioration of health or mental state, or even death" I just lifted that from wikipedia 😉 at the time I was writing this poem I was so fascinated with this female demon who is said to be beautiful, have an ability to not only seduce any guy but use that as a weapon. She's also known as Lilith. She just seemed relevant. I chose to call myself Elanor because "El" means God and "or" Light in Hebrew. The name means God is my Light or God is my candle. Thanks for the feedback. I really appreciate it. I like getting to see my work from someone else's eyes and yours were perfect. Thanks. I'll be reading your work too😉

Date Received: 2018-06-24 17:11:41